I intended to have Primrose speaking to Kyri and company. She’s telling them to go but Colindra stays. I can see how it can be interpreted that Primrose is talking to Ben and telling him to leave with the army. Rats.
Oh well. Sometime it’s a hit. Other times it’s a ground out. 🙁 My bad. But it will become clearer in the next few pages.
Just mentioning something, it’s not that important. I think the dots after ‘Along with Colindra, the dog, and all of their stones’ are actually commas. Not really important… Oh well, I’ve already said it.
This one is still present as well. Yay iPod’s Retina display. I really do need to get better glasses. (It doesn’t help that my main computer monitor is 1440p, about 3-4x the width of most websites.)
Send your army away and stand with the rockers who you’ve completely pissed off. This does not sound like a stragetically sound plan.
But yay Ben!
I intended to have Primrose speaking to Kyri and company. She’s telling them to go but Colindra stays. I can see how it can be interpreted that Primrose is talking to Ben and telling him to leave with the army. Rats.
Oh well. Sometime it’s a hit. Other times it’s a ground out. 🙁 My bad. But it will become clearer in the next few pages.
EDIT: Fixed it with added dialogue. 🙂
There we go! That makes much more sense and is far more Primrose! 🙂
I have a plan, we put a fake nose and hat on primrose, call her a witch and burn her!
Witches can be sexy, too. 😉
And who’s to say a fake nose and pointed hat aren’t sexy. Not me. 😉
Just mentioning something, it’s not that important. I think the dots after ‘Along with Colindra, the dog, and all of their stones’ are actually commas. Not really important… Oh well, I’ve already said it.
Oh yeah. I should really wear my glasses when I work. 🙂 I’ll fix it when I get a chance.
This one is still present as well. Yay iPod’s Retina display. I really do need to get better glasses. (It doesn’t help that my main computer monitor is 1440p, about 3-4x the width of most websites.)
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Thanks again for reminding me. It’s still on my list. 🙂
“All of their stones…” Does the “their” refer to Cole & the dog or to the whole group of rockers?
Cole and the dog. Primrose already has their stones in hand (Ben has them).