The one problem I have so far is your tendency to switch scenes and locations abruptly and, for instance here, with no explanation as to where we are, why we’re in a new scene or what’s happening.
That said – that is a freakin’ COOL lizard thing …
Thanks. And I hear you about the scene changes. I probably need to add some narration boxes. I’ll put it on my list of things to fix.
Yeah, those little “meanwhile, in fooland” boxes really help .
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The one problem I have so far is your tendency to switch scenes and locations abruptly and, for instance here, with no explanation as to where we are, why we’re in a new scene or what’s happening.
That said – that is a freakin’ COOL lizard thing …
Thanks. And I hear you about the scene changes. I probably need to add some narration boxes. I’ll put it on my list of things to fix.
Yeah, those little “meanwhile, in fooland” boxes really help
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